Please read my epilogue and chapter 1 of my story. Thanks!?

Remember everything said is constructive critique, it's not to put you down nor is it making fun of you. In my own personal opinion this story just doesn't grab my attention. You need the beginning to be a grabber, catch the readers attention to keep them wanting more. For instance, instead of explaining why you killed her in the beginning have your epilogue about how you're killing her. That in turn will make the reader think, "Hm, what's happening here, who and why is he killing this little girl. Is it for fun? Or something else." The way you have it now makes it seem to drag on. In your first chapter don't talk about everyone you've killed and why, make it like the cops suspect you and you're telling them the whole story from the very beginning in the court room. Get it? Sorry if this is harsh but, it's just supposed to help. Keep writing. You'll get better.